{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"51783032","dateCreated":"1331867334","smartDate":"Mar 15, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"Timmy46","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Timmy46","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/english10improvingwriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/51783032"},"dateDigested":1532144055,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Own writing","description":"h","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"51823922","body":"I agree with timmy46 about how this person gave plenty of detail. They explained it thorouhgly and it was easy to comprehend.","dateCreated":"1331996663","smartDate":"Mar 17, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"brandonwithAbeard","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/brandonwithAbeard","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"50941422","dateCreated":"1330293363","smartDate":"Feb 26, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"btlove1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/btlove1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/english10improvingwriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/50941422"},"dateDigested":1532144055,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Feedback","description":"Use this area to write your feedback. Make sure you specify which paragraph you are using. Make sure you respond to at least one classmate.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"51439716","body":"From observing paragraph one, the paragraph didnt meet the requirements for it to be a 100% A. Your grammar in your topic sentence wasnt correct. In the poems "Simile", "Moon Rondeau", "Woman....." That is not correct it should of been In the poems "Simile", "Moon Rondeau",and "Woman"....& so on. You Listed Things that the author said but didnt support it with any evidance from the text.
\n Paragraph two was great. It compared and contrasted the similarities and the differences the right way. The Grammar in the paragraph was good as well. If It was up to be , paragraph two would receive an 100% A .","dateCreated":"1331179638","smartDate":"Mar 7, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"keyara7596","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/keyara7596","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"51461474","body":"From readin the first paragraph, it was a good comparsion of the poems. But however you coud have gave a little more informaton that you should site from the text. Also aas far as you grammar, you should use present tense words not past.","dateCreated":"1331226595","smartDate":"Mar 8, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"edwardM3","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/edwardM3","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"51588368","body":"From reading the second paragraph, I observed that the writer could have used more text support to explain the points that the author made. The grammar was good. However it could have been more detailed
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\nI agree with edwardM3, in paragraph one the writer could have gave a little more information that the writer should have sited from the text.","dateCreated":"1331523171","smartDate":"Mar 11, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"Z.G.","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Z.G.","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"51783104","body":"I agree with Edwardm3, this person gave a lot of examples in the first two poems but they seemed to loose me whem they didn't have enoufht information also. It seemed like they were giving us extra facts that are not needed","dateCreated":"1331867501","smartDate":"Mar 15, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"Timmy46","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Timmy46","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"51783106","body":"I agree with Edwardm3, this person gave a lot of examples in the first two poems but they seemed to loose me whem they didn't have enoufht information also. It seemed like they were giving us extra facts that are not needed","dateCreated":"1331867502","smartDate":"Mar 15, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"Timmy46","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Timmy46","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"51893388","body":"This person gave numerous details and vividly compare and contrast the story in paragraph 2. How ever they should of added a line from the texts to support their thoughts.I will give this person a B+","dateCreated":"1332191872","smartDate":"Mar 19, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"lexylex","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/lexylex","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"51987520","body":"Keyara, I am slightly confused about your post. You said that the beginning was incorrect, but your suggestion did not indicate a difference. Was this an error on your part?","dateCreated":"1332366540","smartDate":"Mar 21, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"btlove1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/btlove1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"51987534","body":"Edward, yes...when discussing literature it should be discussed in present tense.","dateCreated":"1332366570","smartDate":"Mar 21, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"btlove1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/btlove1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"52044016","body":"I Also agree with Edward because the writer gave pretty good points from the poems, but he forgot to add quotation marks after the title of the poems. In the second response, the writer gave the reader some good details from all of the poems and is grammar wasn't as bad as the first response","dateCreated":"1332460294","smartDate":"Mar 22, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"Emory-Stafford","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Emory-Stafford","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"52062466","body":"I agree with both Edward and Emory, the writer had a few errors but made very good points. I also feel asthough the writer could have sited more information, from the text.","dateCreated":"1332507630","smartDate":"Mar 23, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"Daizjaa","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Daizjaa","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"52064904","body":"I also agree with Edward, I felt that in the 2nd paragraph there was a better introduction than in the first paragraph. Also, there could have been more examples from the text .","dateCreated":"1332510405","smartDate":"Mar 23, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"Cassidy-Caton","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Cassidy-Caton","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"52064906","body":"I also agree with Edward, I felt that in the 2nd paragraph there was a better introduction than in the first paragraph. Also, there could have been more examples from the text .","dateCreated":"1332510406","smartDate":"Mar 23, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"Cassidy-Caton","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Cassidy-Caton","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":1}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}