{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"51451714","dateCreated":"1331217291","smartDate":"Mar 8, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"Timmy46","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Timmy46","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/english10improvingwriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/51451714"},"dateDigested":1532144064,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Fat","description":"Like my class mate Randy stated maybe fat is not the best word to use in this paragraph. I think that this was kind of a stereotype to just because a person dissent mean that they smell food more that us. Also a better term could have been "overweight", "obeise". This could have been a little hurtful to somebody reading this.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"52046618","body":"I would suggest that they use a better term than "fat". That can be very offensive. Also that had sentences that could have been split up, and turned into two. In addition to them using better terms they could have used more research information, to get their point across","dateCreated":"1332464083","smartDate":"Mar 22, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"Daizjaa","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Daizjaa","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"50721250","dateCreated":"1329776188","smartDate":"Feb 20, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"btlove1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/btlove1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/english10improvingwriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/50721250"},"dateDigested":1532144064,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Peer Feedback","description":"Based on the paragraph you read AND the one with the comments, were any of your suggestions the same as what you would have suggested? Were there areas that you would have commented on that are not shown in the feedback provided? How do you feel about providing peer feedback?","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"50875624","body":"When I read the revise of the paragraph I had similar suggesting. When the author use fat when they could have use obese, and certain period marks.Giving feedback is not only benefiting the author on their mistakes it also helps the reader in what not to do when writing an essay.","dateCreated":"1330061349","smartDate":"Feb 23, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"lexylex","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/lexylex","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"50908684","body":"Based on the paragraph I read and the one with the comments, some of my suggestions were the same. When it stated \u201cIs FAT the best term? Overweight or obese may be nicer\u201d I would have also suggested that. There are no areas that I would have commented on that are not shown in the feedback provide. And providing peer feedback is very helpful to that author and the reader.
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\nI agree with Lexylex because peer feedback is not only benefiting the author it also helps the reader in what not to do when writing an essay. Also, I agree that the author could have used "obese" instead of "fat".","dateCreated":"1330125156","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"Z.G.","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Z.G.","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"50977826","body":"After reading that paragraph i felt the author could have used better dialogue. The author continuously referred to obese people as fat and i don't feel that was appropriate for the essay. I agree with both lexylex and Z.G. Peer Feedback is very helpful for both the author and peers because the author might change their writing skills on their next essay.","dateCreated":"1330367798","smartDate":"Feb 27, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"randy.thomas","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/randy.thomas","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"51333532","body":"Very good start. So, these seem to be the same types of things you would comment on when offering peer-feedback. It is important to remember that when giving and receiving feedback you are mindful so that you avoid some of the mistakes, or include some of the strong points.","dateCreated":"1331003853","smartDate":"Mar 5, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"btlove1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/btlove1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"51465182","body":"Based on the paragraph i feel that that the person could have used better dialogue.","dateCreated":"1331229904","smartDate":"Mar 8, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"edwardM3","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/edwardM3","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"51823874","body":"i think this was a little personal for certain people. Just because some peope are persay fat doesnt make their sense of smell better.","dateCreated":"1331996443","smartDate":"Mar 17, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"brandonwithAbeard","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/brandonwithAbeard","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"51903270","body":"In my opinion I think the essay could of been way better . The dialogue was all wrong . No indents ,no correct grammar ..nothing it was awful . Obesed people shouldn't be referred as fat people . Obese is a better term for essays . Hope these tips come in handy for the next essay .","dateCreated":"1332207251","smartDate":"Mar 19, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"keyara7596","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/keyara7596","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"51951598","body":"I think my comments would be similar to the ones provided. The gramer was incorrect and I think the writer could have used a better choice of words. I would have left close to the same comments that were back. I feel okay about leaving feedback on a paper.","dateCreated":"1332295874","smartDate":"Mar 20, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"Cassidy-Caton","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Cassidy-Caton","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"52035402","body":"After reading that paragaph, i thought it could have been detailed way more than it was, also, the grammar was terrible and they should have proof read there essay before it was turned in","dateCreated":"1332447348","smartDate":"Mar 22, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"Emory-Stafford","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Emory-Stafford","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}