Before beginning this page, go see the comments I made in the Step 2 discussion. Then, return to this page. Using your notes and the discussion about the peer feedback, read the following paragraph. Then, in the discussion area, offer specific feedback to this paragraph according to line number. Please point out GOOD and BAD characteristics
Don't be confused. I have numbered EACH line. This is to make it easy to reference. It is still ONE paragraph. When you offer feedback, do not just talk about grammar. Read the prompt and think about what content should be included.
Prompt: Analyze the main problem faced by each character in both stories.
(1) In both stories Shan Shan and Nemaka struggled with their love life, their parents did not accept the fact that they wanted to find true love. (2)They tried to set up their love life by picking people they wanted them to love, or choosing someone whom they thought was good for them. (3) So many people judged them and tried to tell them what was best for them so they trouble trusting or falling into a deep love. (4) Shan Shan did not know who to fall in love with because her culture only married for money so it was hard to fall into a real love. (5) Nnemaka was only to marry someone from his culture and if he did that he would have been in a relationship but that doesn't mean he's deeply in love.
E.M.
(1) In both stories Shan Shan and Nemaka struggled with their love life, their parents did not accept the fact that they wanted to find true love. (2)They tried to set up their love life by picking people they wanted them to love, or choosing someone whom they thought was good for them. (3) So many people judged them and tried to tell them what was best for them so they trouble trusting or falling into a deep love. (4) Shan Shan did not know who to fall in love with because her culture only married for money so it was hard to fall into a real love. (5) Nnemaka was only to marry someone from his culture and if he did that he would have been in a relationship but that doesn't mean he's deeply in love.(6) But both Shan Shan and Nemaka find it difficult to fall in love because through out their whole life their parents put in their mind that love should be this way and that way. To me there is no right or wrong way to love somebody.
Before beginning this page, go see the comments I made in the Step 2 discussion. Then, return to this page. Using your notes and the discussion about the peer feedback, read the following paragraph. Then, in the discussion area, offer specific feedback to this paragraph according to line number. Please point out GOOD and BAD characteristics
Don't be confused. I have numbered EACH line. This is to make it easy to reference. It is still ONE paragraph.
When you offer feedback, do not just talk about grammar. Read the prompt and think about what content should be included.
Prompt: Analyze the main problem faced by each character in both stories.
(1) In both stories Shan Shan and Nemaka struggled with their love life, their parents did not accept the fact that they wanted to find true love. (2)They tried to set up their love life by picking people they wanted them to love, or choosing someone whom they thought was good for them. (3) So many people judged them and tried to tell them what was best for them so they trouble trusting or falling into a deep love. (4) Shan Shan did not know who to fall in love with because her culture only married for money so it was hard to fall into a real love. (5) Nnemaka was only to marry someone from his culture and if he did that he would have been in a relationship but that doesn't mean he's deeply in love.
E.M.
(1) In both stories Shan Shan and Nemaka struggled with their love life, their parents did not accept the fact that they wanted to find true love. (2)They tried to set up their love life by picking people they wanted them to love, or choosing someone whom they thought was good for them. (3) So many people judged them and tried to tell them what was best for them so they trouble trusting or falling into a deep love. (4) Shan Shan did not know who to fall in love with because her culture only married for money so it was hard to fall into a real love. (5) Nnemaka was only to marry someone from his culture and if he did that he would have been in a relationship but that doesn't mean he's deeply in love.(6) But both Shan Shan and Nemaka find it difficult to fall in love because through out their whole life their parents put in their mind that love should be this way and that way. To me there is no right or wrong way to love somebody.