6a.+Learning+to+Revise

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 * Activity 2:** Re-visit the paragraph on Your Turn!. Based off of the feedback you gave in the discussion area on that page, write a revised version of the paragraph. Type your revised copy in a MS Word document. Then, copy it. Click //EDIT// at the top of this page. The page will open for you to edit. Underneath this, type your initials in BOLD, and then paste your paragraph.


 * Activity 3:** Visit the discussion area and answer the two questions. Be sure that you respond at least 2 classmates. You cannot respond to the //discussion// question until someone else the group offers you critical feedback on what you have written.

**C.C:** In both stories Shan Shan and Nemaka struggled with their love life, their parents did not accept the fact that they wanted to find true love. They tried to set up their love life by picking people their parents wanted them to love, or choosing someone whom they thought was good for them. So many people judged them and tried to tell them what was best for their love life so they had trouble trusting or falling into a deep love. Shan Shan did not know who to fall in love with because her culture only married for money so it was hard to fall into a real love. Nnemaka was only to marry someone from his culture and if he did that he would have been in a relationship but he would not be deeply in love.

A.J: (1) In both stories Shan Shan and Nemaka struggled with their love life, their parents did not accept the fact that they wanted to find true love. (2)In “Love must not be forgotten “ Nemaka father tried to set up his love life by picking a special girl out of the tribe for him. (3) Many people judged Nekmaka for he disrespected his father choice and went with his own. ON the other hand in Shan Shan her mother told her she should take her time, no matter how long it takes be patience. (4) Shan Shan did not know who to fall in love with because her culture only married for money so it was hard to find true love. (5) None the less they both continued with their beliefs on love, not matter what anyone have to say.